I listened to yours as well, and I'd say it is the cleaner of the three, however it still does exhibit the same problems as the original (namely the highs need to be boosted)
While I am not really out to defend or otherwise what I did in 15 minutes, I will say two things on this. This does come down to personal preference to an extent, while I obviously boosted the highs, and I thought Fon's was an improvement, I also thought that Fon's highs were a bit too harsh from being boosted so much personally. As I said, a lot comes down to personal opinion and for something that was done in a relatively short timespan, for I am certain all of us, there is a lot of subjectiveness going on:)
The other thing I will say is that part of why I chose not to boost the highs any stronger is there is already evidence of something undesired going on in that section I needed to track down, and boosting them farther just brought that out more. This is not the same thing that led to what I believe to be the harshness in Fon's version, most likely this is related to a phase problem introduced by the amount of EQ used or specific EQs I did use as I used several different filters (Ranging from Harrison, to Glame, to LinuxDSP), or it is possible it is artifacts from the multiband gating I used to clean up the hiss, or possibly one of those accentuated by the other. The end result is that with that going on I felt it better not to boost any more;)
All that being said I do like several things about Fon's and was tempted to just see how it sounded if I merely cleaned it up a bit. But decided not to in my case for a variety of reasons:)