This has a nice mood. But sadly I can understand only fractions of the singing,
because most of the time it can't compete within the mix. Maybe you could
increase the volume, thin out the mix, apply more compression or do it over
with a bit less dramatic expression but clearer articulation.
The drums seem to be too laid-back, dragging behind the beat a bit.
The snare sounds cutted off in a way that I think doesn't work for this track.
Personally, and maybe it's just me.. but I think it could use more
cowbell.
Rob