4 Oct
2006
4 Oct
'06
5:42 a.m.
On Tue, Oct 03, 2006 at 10:37:48PM +0700, Patrick Shirkey wrote:
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>http://www.archive.org/details/theres_a_girl
That's an interesting take on the topic.
- The wind is a nice touch.
- The timbre and rhythm of the vocal track fits very nicely.
Thanks :)
- Your English passes the basic test of not obviously
sounding like a
second language. Which is something that I have found ruins many
otherwise well crafted Amatuer/Semi-pro tracks.
Cool. Havn't actualy spoken english since several years, but
I listened to drew's spoken words closely and after dozens of
takes ... :)
- I found myself wanting the vocal to start about 1
minute into the track.
My suggestion is to bring in the vocal track earlier and loop it a
couple more times with more effects/layering/remixing/dubbing each time
to really highlight and emphasize the tormented, cynical and slightly
submissive nature of the lyrics.
I considered looping it 3 or 4 times, but was worried it could only wear
out. The last line of the text justs asks for an end. But if I ever toch
this again, I will take your suggestion into account.
--
Thorsten Wilms