He Llewellyn! I rather liked the piece. Although I must say it sounds a bit repetitive. But first things first. I feel the rhythmic synth in the left speaker is a bit to loud. It comes too much into the foreground, where it's style suggests, that it is a nice background component. When you get the distorted synth in (right speaker) you also do a repetitive pattern on it. I thought it might be nicer to have it develope into a solo. Gives the piece something new and developing. I'd also say: shorten it a bit, or play more with the arrangement. Tiny things might do a lot of good. Like when the breaks (with only one guitar) come up, use two guitars in the next break, playing exactly the same or only stressing single notes of the complete pattern. Insert some solo/melody instrument. And yes: I didn't find the vocals either. Must have got lost on the way. Perhaps they are the clue, we now missed out on, in terms of development. But to make certain you keep my overall opinion: I liked it. Good recording and in the beginning it sounds a bit progressive rock. :-) Hope you and your father are alright and that you still can enjoy Dream Theatre - or was it Symphony X? -! Friednly regards Julien -------- Music was my first love and it will be my last (John Miles) ======== FIND MY WEB-PROJECT AT: ======== http://ltsb.sourceforge.net the Linux TextBased Studio guide ======= AND MY PERSONAL PAGES AT: ======= http://www.juliencoder.de

Llewellyn Beasley skrev: Hi Llewellyn I find you piece quite exiting and well done. I desagree with other comments about the late strokes on second and fouth beat, if it was rigth on spot the drums would be too syntetic for my taste. /Sv-e

Llewellyn Beasley wrote: Okay, I'll jump. The mix throughout is good, nicely balanced, but I agree that at times your drum groove is just a little bit too relaxed. To my ears there is often an audible flamming between the snare and the downbeat, personally I'd tighten it up a bit. On another personal note: I know you call it a song, but to me it's more of a groove loop (though the progression at ~4' is noticeable). More formal variety would be welcome, and vocals usually create what I call a song. Of course you can always claim inspiration from Mendelssohn. :) The recorded sound is very good, as is the playing. The guitars are especially sweet. I agree with the respondent who advised letting it sit for a week. Return to it with a fresh outlook, see what happens, post it again. Gee, that's such good advice I think I should start following it myself. :) Thanks for sharing ! Best, dp