Le 24/05/2017 à 11:52, Louigi Verona a écrit :
Hey Benoît!
Let me add some suggestions that might enhance the tune.
1. The piano accompaniment could stay as simple as it is, but I would
advice playing around with note velocities. Currently all notes are of
the same velocity which makes it sound very mechanistic. Instead, one
can put emphasis on a dominant note and make the rest quieter, or make
velocities change - become quieter or slower. This is especially
important when your piano sounds on its own, in the beginning.
Absolutely. I will fine tune velocities next round ;-)
2. Compositionally I would not have the piano in the
beginning. It is
just way too simple for that. The piece is rather slow and I felt that
such a slow start might put listeners off. I would also rethink the
development of the tune. It sounds like a soundtrack piece, and there is
some interesting development in the middle, but this kind of tune could
benefit from much more variety, both melodic and compositional. Change
of tone, pace could be extremely beneficial here.
Thank you for your comments, i will give another attempt to reorder
things in the composition.
Benoît